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If I die before I wake
Promise me that you wont break
Tell me that you wont pick up
Any whiskey in your cup
Promise me you will be strong
and remember the difference
Between right and wrong
Leave the blade in the drawer
and dont use it anymore
Leave your tears in your eyes
and save them for another time
If I die before I wake
Promise me that you wont break.
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theyellowmeteor Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014
Emotional.
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xxXxBrokenxAngelxXxx Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you
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Rekos48 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it. I had just been trying to write something with a similar (If not exactly the same) message for a song, actually. xD
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xxXxBrokenxAngelxXxx Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! Means a lot!
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Krazyk095 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Student Writer
This was brilliant! The consistent rhythm really helped the flow, and the slow breaking down of the rhyme scheme (intentional?) worked well with the tone, without breaking the smooth rhythm. Well done :D

The subject matter is very hard hitting, too. Good use of language :-)
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xxXxBrokenxAngelxXxx Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for taking the time to read it! So glad you enjoyed it:D (Big Grin) 
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Krazyk095 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Student Writer
My pleasure ^.^
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edgeofjade Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013
You really have talent! But what I like most about your poem is that its short but with poignant clarity. I also like the idea that the speaker in the poem might be committing suicide and is asking a lover, a friend or family not to do what he/she intends to do (as suggested by the lines: Leave the blade in the drawer, and don't use it anymore).

Looking forward to more of your poems.
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xxXxBrokenxAngelxXxx Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you:happybounce: 
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WhatDreamsAreMadeUv Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful; the rhythm pounds as you read it and it rolls off the page as the poetry in the message itself sings.

I look forward to reading more. :)
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