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The curls and the lipstick,
The fancy shoes and clothes.
They hide all the feelings,
Anything she doesn’t want to show.
She cries in her bedroom,
then puts on her fake smile.
She covers all her sadness,
Behind society’s style.
and just wishes she could be,
anything and everything
the people around her expect her to be.
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Tomorrow~ A Poem
Too Cold
Hey there,
here on behalf of 
with the critique you requested.
I think you did a pretty good job with this. Your message is clear, and the subject relatable.
Although the poem is short, the length works well.
If I have any criticism, it would be the double use of ‘be’ in the second stanza. I find myself wishing you had used something else- stretched your creativity. The stanza starts out strong- I especially enjoyed the rhyming oft smile and style, but it fell a little flat at the end. A small revision could really strengthen this piece.
I hope this is helpful. Thank so much and have a great day!